Although your sample revisions were good, we feel that very little of Martha’s personality section changed between the original application and the revisions. We still don’t get much of a sense of who Martha is outside her relationships with other characters and the section as a whole is still balanced heavily in favor of description of her surface personality traits rather than analysis of the motivations which drive those traits. Unfortunately, as we cannot offer you revisions twice in one app round, we must decline your application.