Thank you for applying to Ataraxion! Before we can make a final decision on your application, however, we would like to see revisions on the following.
◆ A little expansion of your personality section, specifically Lena's deeper motivations and internal workings, with a focus on her weaknesses and flaws.
◆ We'd also like a new first person sample, as it can be difficult to illustrate characters' narrative voice during their very first introduction to the Tranquility and we didn't get much of a sense of Lara's personality from the sample you provided. It can be either set during the game (feel free to use a previous event or portray how you imagined Lena would have settled in) or linked from an external source: Something you've written before is perfectly acceptable in this section!
Please reply with the necessary information within 72 hours. If you require an extension, please contact a mod before your time expires. Thank you!
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