Thank you for applying to Ataraxion! Before we can make a final decision on your application, however, we would like to see revisions on the following.
◆ We'd like a short explanatory paragraph on your choice of canon-point and why you feel taking her before the reversal of the paradox is optimal.
◆ We'd also like to see revisions on Martha's personality. While we're aware this app is already a significant and impressive revision, we still feel there needs to be more depth. We'd specifically like her motivations and the reasoning behind her actions, as well as more time devoted to her weaknesses.
◆ We'd also like a new first person/comms sample, as it can be difficult to illustrate characters' voice during their very first introduction to the network. Feel free to use a previous event or assume that Martha has had a chance to settle in. Something that demonstrates more of the the personality you've outlined in earlier sections would be great.
Please reply with the necessary information within 72 hours. If you require an extension, please contact a mod before your time expires. Thank you!
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