Thank you for applying to Ataraxion! Before we can make a final decision on your application, however, we would like to see revisions on the following.
◆ We would like a significant expansion of Krynda's personality. While you have presented good examples and touched on the key points, we feel that your current personality is more a repetition of these points than an in-depth analysis. For example, we'd like some expansion on her internal workings and motivation, as well as how the personality she exhibits to others enabled her to serve as a powerful figurehead. We would also like to see both further analysis of how her perceptions of others and personal faults led to her betrayal, and of the reasons that betrayal impacted her so deeply.
Please reply with the necessary information within 72 hours. If you require an extension, please contact a mod before your time expires. Thank you!
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