Thank you for applying to Ataraxion! Before we can make a final decision on your application, however, we would like to see revisions on the following.
◆ While your grasp on the character seems strong, we'd really like to see how he interacts within the setting of the Tranquility, so please provide a new first and third person sample, that give a sense of Proto Zoa's reaction to space. They can be Test Drive meme links, and you're welcome to set them after his initial arrival in the medbay.
◆ Your personality section seems a little short, so we would like a couple more paragraphs. Focus not just on his outward demeanor, but his motivations, his strengths and weaknesses, his relationships to other characters in the universe.
◆ You seem to have accidentally missed a couple of sections, including requesting a number (though we can always RNG one for you) and Inventory — was Proto Zoa planning to find his cards in his locker?
Please reply with the necessary information within 72 hours. If you require an extension, please contact a mod before your time expires. Thank you!
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