◆ Penelope's history section is more brief than we'd like to see from OC applications. While you've given us a good summary of her life so far, we'd love to see more of a detailed expansion on many of the things you've covered, such as the significant events in her life and how they impacted her, and her interactions with family and peers.
◆ At the moment Penelope's personality comes across as very much about her surface and how she displays herself to people, largely defensively. We'd like to gain more insight into the brief mentions you give of what's underneath, such as the issues she refuses to explain and the emotional vulnerabilities she seeks to avoid showing, and why she would have deliberately created an abrasive exterior to protect these. We would also like to see some more details on specific relationships in her life, in order to gain more idea of how she may develop CR in game.
◆ Your description of Penelope's spell and curse-casting is a little more nebulous than we're comfortable accepting. We'd like a more structured expansion on these abilities, perhaps even a list of spells/curses that she is experienced with, or that are her particular favorites or go-tos, and that you would like her to still be capable of in Ataraxion.