◆ While we acknowledge the early canonpoint you've chosen to take Jaime from, we'd like to see a brief paragraph or two on his later development and the understanding we gain from his POV chapters, particularly as it pertains to how he interacts with people outside his family.
◆ We'd also like an extension to the personality discussing Jaime's role as the eldest son and, for several years, heir to Casterly Rock, the privilege he has being a rich male from a prestigious family in the world of Westeros, and the effect that has had on his innate personality and the way in which he sees the world. Further expansion to the first paragraph of your personality would also be welcome, given that at your chosen canonpoint Jaime has not yet developed or grown in touch with what is beneath his awful veneer.
◆ Finally, we'd like a new third person sample that better expresses Jaime's psychology, motivations, and inner narrative, and which demonstrates the personality you have written. You may choose to set this during an unseen canon moment, or in Ataraxion itself.