Thank you for applying to Ataraxion! Before we can make a final decision on your application, however, we would like to see revisions on the following.
◆ While your application is strong and shows a good grasp of voice, we would like to see some expanded analysis of aspects of Helena's personality. We would like this to include more detailed reasoning regarding how her history as an abuse victim at the hands of the Proletheans has impacted her development, psychology and behavior, as well as the way she makes connections with others (especially children). ◆ Additionally, you touch on the matter of her self-harm habit very briefly. As this is a sensitive issue and Ataraxion is a psychological horror game, we would like to see this expanded further, including motivation for why she does it and why she's stopped. ◆ Lastly, we would like to see more on her current feelings regarding the Prolethean church.
Please reply with the necessary information within 72 hours. If you require an extension, please contact a mod before your time expires. Thank you!
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